Please fix my sentences if there is any problems like grammar or sounds like be weird.
1. When I went to New York City, I met heavy rain. So I had to stay in a hotel for all day long.
2. When I played soccer, I went to some place to pick up a ball. There were a lot of lock like stone, and I fell down at there. So I got a big scar.
3.In my country, when women becomes to get marry, most women tend to dislike first born man. The reason is that first born man have a duty which has to have their parents with them. That’s why most women don’t like first born guy. Also women hesitate when first born guy ask to get marry to them. (or… Also women hesitate when first born guy ask them to get marry to…. which one is the better and sounds like natural.)
4. I bought this camera from website. They sell lots of electronic devices such as mp3, i pod, video camera, and so on… Also the price is lower than Bestbuy. I already compared with Bestbuy. It was around 100 dollars cheaper than Bestbuy. So I decided to get the camera which is 100dollars cheaper. But the product was reformed which means the product come out to customers. and if the customers don’t like the products and they will require a refund or change their goods. So the price of the products which are selling now is a little low.
Jeremiah